Thursday, 20 August 2015

Hide and seek
The trees a blowing a big storm is coming The little boy is getting frightened  as the storm is getting closer and closer. he's still hiding but no one has found me yet but then I heard sound it was a the trees making noise at the birds I went aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!! when I was hiding under the house outside, it was cold and freezing  and dark everyone is asleep but me.  But I am still hiding and my sister still cannot find me but she will find me soon then when i get found i will be safe and sound and tuck  nice and warm in bed. 10 minutes later i  have been found and my mum is so glad to have me back home.


From Jessica

2 comments:

  1. Well done Jessica your story is very detailed but it could be a little bit more in stead of a short detailed story it could have been a long detailed story .

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  2. Hi Jess
    I think that this story is amazing and very detailed and long
    ELZ

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Thank-you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.